Waiting
by Robert Neest
A tall and wooden window’s open wide
And lets the early summer sunshine slip
Inside the dimly lit and narrow room
And draw few feeble shadows on the walls.
Beside the window stands a girl and looks
Towards a very distant place, away
From where she stays with shoulders brought in front
While arms are tightly held around her waist.
She wears a lively coloured graceful dress
With stylish shoes that are her favourite pair
And light shines on her nicely done hair
To make her look so beautiful and young.
With trembling hands she reads again the message,
As she has done since she received the news,
When several tears are falling from her eyes
And then are slowly rolling down her face.
Nice poem. Very descriptive. Should the 1st line of the 2nd stanza read "who looks" rather than "and looks"??? ;)
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DeleteVery good poem Robert, just some constructive advice, on this line "And light shines on her nicely done hair" I would change the word "And" to "how" because it will help it to pair better with the line that follows.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the abundance of description and how evocative it was.
Keep writing,
Hannah :)
Thank you very much, Hannah!
DeleteVery beautiful poem
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